New Website

[MWGrubb]

Would you mind looking at a new website?

I have been a performer for over 30 years and wanted to get some feedback from other performers in the trenches.

Here's the link:

http://www.magicsuccessnow.com

Warmly,

Millard

[scot]

I don't think you really want feedback. I think you want to advertise your thing.

just in case:
what is it you're selling? Is it a workshop or a book or a home magic test? You should expect people to look at one headline, one paragraph and a few photos. If you're not getting the message across in those, you loose.

your crap is just confusing. too many nonsense words, you're overselling and that's annoying. there aren't enough photos and it's hard to tell what to read first. If you write like that, I'd hate to give you money for any advice.

Scot Nery's commitment chunking:
people look for a photo. if they like it, they'll commit to reading the headline. if they're still interested, they'll commit to reading the first 3 sentences. Intrigued? they'll read 2 more paragraphs.

[Peter]

Millard, you asked for feedback so I'll give it as honest as I can be. This site smells just like Dave Dee and his bullshit stuff. get to the point, tell me what your selling and how it will benefit me, then tell me how much it is going to cost me. From your site I guess that you are going to teach me how to perform your show. I could give a shit about YOUR show, I have my own. Why are the testimonials there because I have no idea what they are testifyiing to. Then you say it will cost me ONLY $20. except it is $20 for SIX months. That's $120 for a lousy mentalism act that is a dime a dozen when you read Corida.

Not a good site at all.

[Patrick Kelly]

The random all caps are annoying. The varying size fonts and italics are annoying. The highlights are annoying. The content is annoying. It looks more like a classified ad for a diet pill than a website.

You start with a lie telling the reader that it will cost $20 then at the end you find out that it's $120. You lost all credibility with this deception.

I could list more but I think I'll just go get a cheese pizza.

[fettucinibrother]

Re: New Website

Originally posted by MWGrubb
Would you mind looking at a new website?

I have been a performer for over 30 years and wanted to get some feedback from other performers in the trenches.

Here's the link:

http://www.magicsuccessnow.com

Warmly,

Millard

That's not a website... that's a very long and boring commercial. Weak!... is all I have to say.
AL

[Steven Ragatz]

Aaaah! 2500 words on the home page!!! I haven't read that many words in one sitting since I had to do book reports! (And even then the Cliff Notes I used were probably shorter.)

Steven Ragatz

PS. I think you missed one font size (7.5 pt.) Not sure I saw that one...

PPS. I'm a cheapskate - I NEVER pay $20 for a MEDIUM pizza.

[martin ewen]

why is it that it's always the magicians who delude themselves into believing they're marketing geniuses?

Hey buddy, you think everyone's a rube. Big mistake.

What even dumb street street performers don't lack is a certain instinctive cunning and self preservationary nose for bullshit.
The fact that you have to use thousands of words to lull anyone into buying your shlock is enough to tell even the least jaded among us you're full of shit.

Go insult someone elses intelligence you cookie cutter marketing failure.

[raspyni]

Uh?

I didn't get very far on the copy but it got real stinky, real fast. Get in touch with the truth of what you have to offer and lay it out clearly. As someone pointed out earlier you gain creditability in small chunks and I barely got past the headline or subhead.

Oh, and $20 for a medium cheese pizza? Where are you shopping?

Barry

[Butterfly Man]

Holzmanism

"Oh Barry, see how it lies there."

[raspyni]

Barryism

Robert!

Been so long since I've seen you. Hope you are doing well out there on the island. Is it true you're doing America's Got Talent this year?