rrrrRRRRAAAARRRRGH!

[Doctor Eric]

Okay, not working, trying to teach my body to sleep on a polyphasic cycle, twitching alot.... but my new website is up. A bit buggy still, but then, so am I.

Yo baby check it. www.knownothingfamily.org

[Doctor Eric]

More!

Okay, the url is now ericcash.com and I rewrote the bio, and am in the process of changing some other stuff, let me know what you think.

[Cybele]

As requested...

Eric-

I like your new bio! Remember that, I LIKE your new bio! Because now it gets harsh....

"hence" is pretentious, consider changing to "and so" or even "thus" (still pretentious, but less so)

"performance and magic; Imposibleology" should have a colin ( not a semi-colin ( ...Yes, people, these marks are not just for smileys...learn to use them...

started his performing career - make that performance career.

And I LOVE the last sentence of the first paragraph! That's brilliant!

That whole effect/affect thing is biting us in the ass again: his unusual style of effecting audiences looks wrong (Mine), but of affecting audiences (yours) also looks wrong, and I'll have to go look it up. How's about this: "his unusual style of connecting with audiences"?

Since you "shoot" an apple off someone's head, perhaps you could "fire" stuffed toys from a cannon, instead of using shoot twice in a row?

The last sentence of the final paragraph works very well. However, I missed the bit about making yourself 50 feet tall using only sound effects. That sounded like fun, especially if you can do it. Added a breath of silly to what might otherwise be interpreted as hardcore.

Thanks for inviting my adjustments, you Impossibleologist, you.

Although I'm sure Stephon will argue with some of my points.

Dueling grammer geeks; bring it on.

[Cybele]

Jim, we've got a problem.

Shit.

I hate it when computers automatically turn my punctuation marks into "smileys." I can't stand those idiot things, never use them.

The sentence should have read:

"...Impossibleology should have a colin"-- parenthesis-- : --end parenthesis "not a semi-colin"-- parenthesis-- ; --end parenthesis.

Although there's a certain irony to how it turned out.

[Stephon]

Re: As requested...

Originally posted by Cybele
Although I'm sure Stephon will argue with some of my points.

Dueling grammer geeks; bring it on.

Nope, me no am argue about gramma. Unless spelling is included (it's "colon", not "colin").


I agree with Cybele that it should be "effecting" and not "affecting", but "connects" works fine, too.

One thing that was confusing on first read: in the 2nd paragraph, "Every show is an act of exploration" should be separated from the rest of the sentence either with a semicolon or an em-dash (one long or two short dash marks).

On the picky, but doesn't really matter front--in the last paragraph, where you list your skills, they should be separated by commas, not semi-colons.

[Stephon]

Oh, yeah

OK, I lied a little bit: I understand what you mean Cybele about "make the impossible, possible", but since most people are used to hearing it phrased that way, "make possible the impossible" sounds a bit "huh?" to me. If the issue was just the comma, I don't see any reason why it can't be "make the impossible possible."

[Cybele]

Riiiiight....

Thanks, Steph. I thought "colin" looked wrong.

Illustrating my argument that this site needs SpellCheck.

(Not that anyone but you or I would use it.)

Yes, make possible the impossible is a bit "huh?", but so is Impossibleologist. What's yer point?

Oh, and another point about the graphics, Eric: I like the positive and negative arrow effect. You don't see it a lot. Fun.

[Stephon]

Re: Riiiiight....

Originally posted by Cybele
Yes, make possible the impossible is a bit "huh?", but so is Impossibleologist. What's yer point?

Just that while Impossibleologist is a made up word that people haven't seen before, it's huh?-ness (see, I can make up words, too) seems natural, but since most people have heard the phrase "making the impossible possible", changing it around may read oddly to some.

And if that's not a good enough reason, then. . .hey, stilt mime, look out! There's a giant invisible wall in front of you!

(*sigh* My life is so empty. . .)

OKILYBB

[scot]

Not that this will change your opinions, but Eric's style is reallly in your face. The things that sound backwards are supposed to be a little jarring.

He also has a pretencious, high-status character which has no business being either -- like CC's tramp or Ace Ventura.

[Doctor Eric]

High Falutin' moron, thass me

"Oh, and another point about the graphics, Eric: I like the positive and negative arrow effect. You don't see it a lot. Fun."

That's actually a chaos symbol, but most people don't know what that is, other than the general sense implied, which is why I like it.

That, and I can still desperately cling to my punk rock roots.

[Cybele]

You mean, it's not natural?

I'd have thought you were a little young for "punk rock roots." But I suppose only your hairdresser knows for sure.

xox

[Minnie Maniac]

I don't really know why I care, but I have to tell you that you were right the first time.

'affect' is right. 'effect' is wrong. To affect the audience means you alter their emotions. To effect them implies that you have made them magically appear or something. I don't think many people know how to use puctuation properly, so wouldn't notice the difference between colons and semi-colons, but a grammatical error like this will be seen.

Just to clarify, here is an excerpt from a dictionary website:

Usage Note: Affect and effect have no senses in common. As a verb affect is most commonly used in the sense of “to influence” (how smoking affects health). Effect means “to bring about or execute”: layoffs designed to effect savings. Thus the sentence These measures may affect savings could imply that the measures may reduce savings that have already been realized, whereas These measures may effect savings implies that the measures will cause new savings to come about.

source: http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=affecting

Hope it helps,
Toni

I don't know what they are teaching in american schools....

[Stephon]

Hmm, this crow tastes good. . .

Minnie, you are absolutely right and I was wrong.

(Unless Eric is trying to either bring about or execute his audience, both of which could be very interesting to watch.)