New Web Site critique

[dave walbridge]

I'm about ready to release this to the world. Its mostly done, but I'd like your response to the "feel" of the whole thing.

Check out www.bigfunshow.com and post your response here.

Thanks in advance,

Dave

[dave walbridge]

wow!

Wow. Dave, I just went to your site and -- ITS GREAT!
Lots of information, but, still somehow it conveys the right image of a corporate fun guy. I have a few quibbles , but I'll detail those later.


DW

[le pire]

Hi Dave,

Nice work. A good clean & consistent site. I like your many uses of the "!" throughout the site. Great job.

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Suggestions:
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I would suggest adding a separate "contact" page (even though your info is at the bottom of each page.)


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Reviews
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I would also suggest a separate reviews page or finding a way to make them more prominent on the page.

Right now the reviews are in the lower left hand corner and they get kind of lost. My eye naturally goes from the picture and then to the central text.


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comedy writing page
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The graphic says "big fun show" but on this page you are not selling the "big fun show" but writing services.

Also, the image in the "!" is of you performing in front of an old man and a stroller (possibly more people), which reinforces the idea of "big fun show" but not "comedy writing."

I suggest the image of you in sun glasses or you & the rubber chicken.


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Shows page
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I suggest you have the pic of you performing here.


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FAQ
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I think the pic of you holding the magnifying glass over your hand to reveal a strategy goes best here.

The pic you currently have here-- magnifying glass over the eye-- I really don't like this photo. It's such a tired and over-used image. I'm sure a creative comedy writer like yourself can come up with something original.

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Resumι
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This needs to be cleaned up a bit. The text is difficult to follow and there is no logic to the order in which you list your experience.


I suggest subheadings. For example:
Corporate Clients
• Target*
• Best Buy
• Nordstrom
• Rainbow Foods*

Festivals
• Taste of Minnesota*
• St. Paul Winter Carnival*
• Minnesota state fair

City Events
• Prairie
• Prior Lake
• Duluth
• Edina
• Arden Hills
• Minneapolis
Saint Paul
• Chanhassen,
• And more!*
etc. etc.

This way people can easily skim your resume to see if their type of event is there.

Although info like "on three different stages!" and "Grand opening for..." are nice details, you clearly have spacing issues here and info like this should be left out so that the overall layout is coherent.

Omit "the" wherever you can (Gutherie theater for example)

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Good Luck & I'll see you at MotionFest.



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[Stephon]

Doppleganger?

Who are you and what have you done with Steve? That post was polite, constructive, helpful, and in no way "French"

I'm shocked! Shocked I say!

[scot]

Front page: photo bad and inconsistent. (rubber chicken much better). Start with a the quotes page. You're lowlighting the quotes on your site. They say the most about who you are for real.

Make your name more prominent

Use "stuff" less. Try using more formal language on your joke writing page.

Shorten every paragraph and take a few paragraphs off every page.

Marketing help: (you seem established, this is for the other pnetters mostly.)
Corporate clients prefer clean shaven.
They aren't looking for someone who's done highschool shows.
Sloppy costumes are a "don't."

Calling your show "the big fun show", "the happy show", "wild juggling show", or "the roger show" are not helpful to you. As soon as someone else even describes their show as "fun", you're in the same category with them you have lost most of your individual identity that fast. roger: they don't remember names, wild juggling: everyone juggles and does crazy stuff, happy: everyone hates happy people.

Super close ups are endearing. The hero in the movies is always close up, and insurance ads use close ups to instill trust and tug at your emotions.

If you're going to use a logo, make it consistent, and use it on everything. Chances are, a logo won't actually help you stand apart, but it could make the client more comfortable with you, and make it easy to organize your promo materials. If one of your promo pieces does not have your logo, it screws everything up. Logos work in mass impression scenarios -- seeing the logo several times over a long period. You should never assume that your logo is enough. Always use your name also. Dave here, uses different exclamation points. Make your logo unique (robert strong is also into exlamation points.)

[slimey]

Make your logo unique (robert strong is also into exlamation points.)

"unique" and "robert strong" should never appear in the same paragraph.

[scot]

wow

That's a brave statement for someone living in anonymity.

The unique thing I immediately notice is, he works hard to get work, and... well, this is the wrong thread.

[dave walbridge]

more web site!

New Photos up!

http://www.bigfunshow.com/pictures.html

[Stephon]

Those are nice, I like 'em.

[Butterfly Man]

last chance to attend my Motionfest diss-directing workshop

Indeed, your pix are BIGGER and more funner than ever ...

[Chris Griffith]

Good Work

Hi Dave - I'm just catching up on this site & wanted to say hello & congrats on your new website. Looks very professional & fun. (Did I say big fun?)

Hope all is well.