My site is on the butcher block

[scot]

Hey y'all;
Go to my site and tell me what I need. Also, post some faqs here if you'd like(faqs are frequently asked questions). I need to answer people's questions before they ask.

I've been working a lot on making the site great. It still needs some stuff. Please, everyone let me know what you think (esp. the negatives).

http://www.jugglegood.com/new

[ 04-20-2003: Message edited by: scot ]</p>

[worldwidese]

Scot,
My first impression is that it is all somehow dark, and that it is a bit bunched up. Needs more negative space and larger and different font. Try a more lighthearted font.

[scot]

I tried putting the body text in Comic Sans MS font. What do you guys think? the last font that wwe commented on was arial.

I am just worried that people will think I'm a clown or a childrens' entertainer. It's dark because I want to look hip and young without flair or gimmick. If you guys have tips about certain elements that need lightening-up, let me know.
Scot

[Stretch]

Adams Family Entertainer? ;&gt [img]wink.gif[/img]

[scot]

Yeah, did you see their posh place? They gotta have the cash. I don't even think they work.

Come on, give me some critiques people.

[ 04-21-2003: Message edited by: scot ]</p>

[le pire]

Ok Scot,

I'm gonna be harsh 'cause you asked me to. And also 'cause I think you're on the right track and you're gonna have a kick-ass website when you are finished.

Here we go:

most people scan a website and don't actually read it.

yours is difficult to scan.

it's very jumbled and I don't know where you want me to look.

There are some good elements but on the whole, it is a mess.

hate the blinking taxi.

red and black is a strong color choice... but let me get this straight, you are a comedian, and not a satan worshipper?
Keep the red and black, just go for comedy more and not "angry young man."

pages:

scot's act- this page is a mess. I don't know where to look. and what's with the ugly fat guy in the middle of the page?

"ACCOLADES"

testimonials are GREAT and they are key in selling your act. The fact that you have testimonials from two national country acts puts you WAY ahead of most of your competition. Unfortunately the sound on the video kind of sucks. Also, Brooks & Dunn and Cletus have drinks in their hands and look like booze swillin' hicks. Roy Einsenstein says "never heard of him" in response to your name. Maybe he is joking, but this joke is lost on me and it makes you look bad.

I think testimonials that are printed work are more effectivly than video testimonials. Besides, you can edit them (especially when they come from crack-pot buskers with tatoos on their head).

photos:

WAY too many photos. pancake 1 - 10. Nope. Should be pancake1 and pancake2. There is only so much pancake a person can take. Same for bucket 1-10. Duct tape 1-9. Knife 1-4. etc.

This copy stinks. re-write it:

An audience member helps Scot prepare for something involving duct tape. What is he planning? A burst of laughter comes when the audience discovers together it's a parody of a yo-yo routine. Though this is a quick bit and sight gag, it's important to show that Scot isn't afraid to do total crap just to make people laugh.

here's why it stinks:

"burst of laughter comes..."

You explain the joke to us, and thus RUIN it.

"Scot isn't afraid to do total crap..."

Don't say that. Not good for sales. If you saw something being advertised as "crap" would you buy it?

BIOGRAPHY:

This is when we should learn about you as a person, and not necessarily the evolution of your show. We want to know your hobbies, favourite cuisine, etc. You could do a little better here.

BOOK SCOT:

again, this copy need a LOT of improvement. What I'm seeing again and again is you really need to learn how to write good copy. I highly recommend reading Randy Chirac's "Millionaire Magician." I'll sell you mine if you want it.

MEDIA ROOM:

"Because of the Saturday show, I was..."
"Had a great show at the Comedy Union..."

this does not belong on this page. Correct me if I'm wrong, but media room is for MEDIA. That is, press clippings and video.

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Overall, I think you need to determine what kind of impression you wish to create on the person who sees your website. You have some great ideas, and are off to a good start, but it needs a clear focus.

You need to learn about sales tools and marketing techniques-- you've obviously got the creative part down. Also, I don't know who you are selling to with a webpage like this. You need to determine your target market.

Keep going, your almost there.

best,


étienne

[ 04-22-2003: Message edited by: le pire ]</p>

[Butterfly Man]

Hey Scot,

When I log on to your site the first thing I saw was a "quick tour" flashing Taxi

so I went to it and clicked ... nothing

then I noticed the links: agent/fans/media ...

then I had to think which one was I? ... uh ...

ok, he may want my opinion as an "agent" first ...

so I click ... text, but no pictures (they don't come up) ... damn!

now I see the "schedule" link

so I click ...

it shows me a calendar of total availability ...why?

maybe have three buttons flashing initially (different pix?)

maybe eliminate the schedule .... they’ll call (that’s what you want anyway)

maybe make yourself less adolescent more sophisticated in your own off-centered way

just a thought ...

[scot]

Yeah, but those are all little things.
-kidding-
I changed:
-changed it to three little taxis on the first page
-scot's act is more prioritized I'm still thinking of an icon for the accolades page
-trimmed down the photo page
-I'll keep working on brightening things up a little
-the copy will be fixed up tonight
-keep the harshness coming. Being gentle won't make a change.

[ 04-22-2003: Message edited by: scot ]</p>

[clapchap]

just lookin at the fans page and noticed some odd centering... "12 in the world" should be brought up with the rest of the sentance and "greeting" and "cards" should go together. What are the greeting cards? All i see when i click it is an englarged card that says HELLO. Props info- im not seein the info on the props, just a bit about your pancake routine. also the HOME button on every page is hard to see against the dark background.
I like the page, those were just a couple things i spotted. Keep it up
-Eric

[Mark Wessels]

A few little things. The pictures of your props look like crap. Other pictures are good. what happened? ON the front page withthe taxi pictures dont label them all quick tour. It says that above them. Label them agent fan etc. The borders on the red section sometimes get messed up on my computer. (not the stitchy ones the dotty ones) and the stitchy borders annoy me. I still like your old site better.

Bitterly,

Mark

ps- shoulda sold me the taxi [img]wink.gif[/img]